Monday, 3 August 2015

Descriptive Writing to hook our readers...

Over the past couple of weeks we have been focusing our writing on description to hook an audience. Students have worked together to edit their writing and find the best possible words to capture the readers attention.


Holding on to my seatbelt, listening to the ramble. Waiting for my go just around the corner.  I see I’m cart 1 and panda 66 is my username for fun. Holding my head waiting, for the light to go green . Off we go, pushing in front, round and round I go. Spinning out to the barrel of tyres. Wow, lets not do that again! I am back on the track, off I go.
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motutapu.
Full of grass and plants as beautiful as is  your backyard.   As my family hopped off the boat, you can see the lite blue  sea.  It took about one hour to get to motutapo. we  planted over 115  plants. In the very end  we had we a lovely bakery treat, it was delicious. The boat ride was bumpy, I nearly fell. It was so much fun. 
the end


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my holiday at the snow

'Oh no! I’m in a hole how did I get here.' ‘Somebody help
me, i’m going to be eatin’, Detroit are you here? yes I
am, can you help me get out of this hole? are you stuck?
"yes i am" ok then i will come get you there might be something in this hole. i can't run in ski boots.
Really i can run in ski boots.


Peter is the bus driver. I sit next to Imogen at the back of the school bus.  Kamand hops off  the bus first. I sit next to Imogen at the back of school bus. kamand Hops off first stop.


Introducing Charlie

As we drove into the driveway I could see the breeder standing outside the door with a tiny pitch black puppy in his arms. I could hear the nice calm wind blowing around. The smell of the crisp wind filled my nostrils as I jumped out of the car and ran to the little puppy. I felt really excited to have a puppy of my own at last. I scooped her up in my arms, she was as soft as a fluffy blanket. Her sparkling eyes looked up at me as she licked my face. I knew it was love at first sight.
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Help!  A dragon's going to eat me!  Wow! He has glowing firey eyes!  Hmm?  He has metal hats and shields for scales!  There’re silver!  His toes are guns?  There’re brown!  He has gold and silver coins for fire!?  I think it is amazing, and cool.  
I feel a little bit scared.  
Fierce action.  Going to everyone.  Wings out.  Tail made of swords.  Furosiously, the dragon lifted his head.       


“WOOOW” I said as a looked outside and saw a thick Cloud like snow. I think snow will be really soft and thick. it was freezing so we lit the toasty fire. I rushed to get my clothes to go outside. when I got dressed I rushed outside and dived in the soft fluffy snow!


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Using all my might halfway there. I'm sweating like a pig. Trying to beat my sister zoe. to the top. 
Oh no zoe's halfway there. Suddenly, I realise I'm at the top, I let go so my
harness slowly lets me down. 
I feel so proud, i ran to my mum and i say "i beat zoe to the top. 
Rock climbing is great.


The mini golf that we went to was pirate themed mini golf. The mini golf that me and my dad and nana went to was in the sky city. we had to drive the longest way because we live in kumeu. i felt bored in the car because at first we got lost around the road. When we actually found the place for mini golf, I knew that we had gone past the park again. So I knew that we went around in a circle 2 times. Then we finally found the place for mini golf.
the end!


In the holidays I went to Rotorua. On the way to Rotorua, it was so smelly i had to block my nose. At the place we stayed it was not as smelly any more. When we were at the place we stayed every night we went for a swim.
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Celebrating my party!

Today’s the best day ever and it’s already time for my friends to come and celebrate.  Look over there it’s Tyler now there’s luca and sam.  Yay Falcon and leigh have come so, that means just katie-leigh is the last one left but now she’s here everyone is here.  I can feel all the happiness inside of me because all of them are here now.  When will the games but best of all I can smell the cake oh those lovely chocolate fingers and smarties.  “Come On guys let’s do musical statues”.  Let the music begin don’t look at my dad or you will know when the music stops.  When will the music stop. I feel like I am moving like a slow moving slug. I can smell the fresh air though the room. Now I can see the music getting rougher. Now I am dancing like a japanese ninja.  Will the music change when I don’t expect it to?  Time for the movie I wonder how that guy felt when he fell off he cliff.  He might of felt scared or calm but I would be frightened!  Everyone it’s ten o'clock time for bed….. Breakfast time  “Pancakes and bacon please”.


T3:descriptive writing.
 I’m spoilt!!!
Have you got everything ready for the sleepover?  Yes I think so,I say. Your clothes?  yes!!!  Your ipod?  I’m determent I have everything Nana!!!

Should we stop at the theaters on the way?  Yes please Nana!!!  You spoil me.  But What should we watch?  Well,there’s Inside out?!?  Lets go!!!

I’ll have a vanilla icecream with some fine chocolate coating please!!!!  Thank you and the movie starts!!!!!



On Saturday me and jacob went to a sleepover and we had dinner at lile, reed house. I was playing with lile and we played with the baby and little cute food. We played with them and I was sleeping in lile bed. We packed our bags in an hour and also I went to the ice barn and it was funny and I had an a drink, it’s was called cranberry drink.


I had my friend Logan over in the holidays . I went to Logans home first.  He came to my house to play.  We played  a game called disney infinity 2.0  where you get to be avengers or a guardian or a spider man character.


The soccer goal !

           Yaay the crowd goes wild with the ball been smashed
           into the back of the net. The goalkeeper is very disappointed
           with mud smudged all over his face from the dive he made.
          As i did my celebration, the goalkeeper is furious with the
          the defender.



Original (3180 × 2476)Jurassic world

The indominus rex is a new dinosaur at jurassic world.
The indominus rex is made out of clutter fish dna. Clutter fish can camouflage. The indominus rex has longer arms than t.rex and raptor. The indomnus roar is estimated to reach 140-160 decibels. It can reach 50 per hour. The indominus rex has three razor sharp claws.

In the holidays I went
to sam b’s bday. we went
to  jump. The foam
pit was awesome. You jump
on a platform  and then
jump on a tramp then
you fall into the
foam pit. you get free
yellow socks that have
grip underneath, but
you have to wear  
everywhere in the foam
pit it felt  all spongy
in there. I see foam
getting  squashed, I feel
excited, and nervous.


SKATE CAMP!

Hard wheels rolling on a halfpipe. BAM the hard wheels landing an ollie. Next i feel hot pavement as i fail a drop in. Finally i landed it. Then i try a rock n roll, i tried it loads but i didn’t do it. On the half pipe i could go up it and spin back around to land. Finally i was brave enough to try a fakie into a spin. i tried  at least  one hundred times but couldn’t do it.    


In Norway the third day I was there we went on a bike ride. Big bits of hail were falling from the sky. It burns when they  pinch  your skin. My skin goes numb, the rain gets harder. The handles get slippery ,the hail stops and the rain gets so hard that my face gets numb. I see the cafe a few minutes away. The cafe greets us with warmth and food.  


That one goal
It was brazil's ball. he skilled every serbian
defender. the goalkeeper was the last defender. if he
missed it maybe all over. It’s a goal! it is a miracle.
the crowd goes wild ! brazil are so happy.


I was looking in the sea. i hear my my dad saying this is before the ship tips. splash swish. the wave hits the boat. i feel the cold water on my feet. i see my dads old work.

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